Thursday, October 28, 2010

Fractured


Whisperings in winter:
tales of memory and loss
chiseled in stone--
everywhere, the fallen.

Quietly lingering
amidst discarded wishes
and dreams of rebirth:
a lone figure
somehow summoning healing
in the passing shadows.


A scent of moss and ashes:
drifting, earthy,
leaves crackling underfoot,
trampled like so many forgotten hopes.  

One too young, found: 
lying grey,
cold, exposed--
not cracked, 
but split quite in two,
awaiting eternal repair.

trying my hand at some pre-Halloween poetry for Magpie 38.

19 comments:

  1. Very nice mag. Sad, but then the mention of 'eternal repair.' Undoubtedly needed by all!

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  2. The line ... awaiting eternal repair ... also caught my attention. That's a lot of work.

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  3. Delightful word in your poem. So peaceful!

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  4. we all can use eternal repair! Nice Magpie

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  5. Beautiful. I especially like "the scent of moss and ashes". Very nice.

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  6. Intense wordplay here adding to teh whole dynamic of the piece. Love and Light, Sender

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  7. "..awaiting eternal repair." Something we all hope for. Nice Magpie.

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  8. it was the last verse that got to me...one taken too young in particular...nice emotional magpie...

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  9. Oh that last verse! I hate it when the too young die. It isn't fair. Beautiful... Beautiful Magpie, Hausfrau.

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  10. A sad tale, but beautifully worded.

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  11. Beautifully told sad tale... 'too young die' kind of lingers in the heart. nicely written.

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  12. Though brief, "summoning healing" and "eternal repair" bring balance to the sadness of the poem. Very nice.

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  13. Beautiful words X

    P.S Thankyou for the lovely 'Welcome Back' X

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  14. A big thanks for the lovely, insightful comments! I hope to visit you all soon, as I didn't quite have time last week.

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  15. This is beautiful...I didn't know you were such a gifted poet as well!

    Quietly lingering
    amidst discarded wishes

    I love that.

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  16. This is stunning. Just beautiful and evocative.

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